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Monday 23 August 2021

Persuasive Writing

Statement: Hippos should have to wear deodorant while walking the streets of LA

Hippos, like any animals, can produce a foul odor that is not only unpleasant for other animals but also harmful to humans and the environment. According to studies, the deodorant that hippos are given not only smells good but also improves the environment. It is scientifically proven that this hippo deodorant makes trees and plants grow faster. For example you have a wild hippo walking around, when they come into contact with any type of plant it is proven to actually grow faster. 

The hippos benefit from this deodorant because it helps them attract female or male hippos, depending on the flavor. All of the berry flavors, for example, attract female hippos, while others, such as watermelon or apple, attract the males. It's proven that now over 82% of hippos are now using this product which not only leaves them smelling good for other hippos it is also great for humans. 


This product actually was proven in a recent study that it helps hippos live longer than their normal life span which is about 40-50 years. It extends that by a few hundred years. It enters the skin cells and goes to it's heart and lungs and makes it better and stronger. It also helps them walk around the hot streets of LA for a long time without needing water around them all the time. It also benefits all of their thick skin by keeping the cells feeling and looking young and wrinkle free.


I hope you now know why Hippos should have to wear deodorant while walking the streets of LA


Task Description: Hello everyone this was my writing task from last week that I decided to finish off. As you can see from the title this writing was a Persuasive piece. Just saying if you can't already tell all these stats and everything in this piece is made up so none of it is real. This was overall really fun piece of writing because we were given a bit of freedom of what we were going to write about which I really enjoy.

3 comments:

  1. Talofa Jane,

    This is such a great piece of writing! I really like how you put the task description after your writing as I was left wondering whether the information was actually true or not! As strange as this topic was, I actually almost believed it! If you hadn't told me it was made up, I would have done a google search to see if there was any evidence to back up your writing :)

    How did you come up with this idea?

    Keep up the awesome work during lockdown, Jane!

    Miss West

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    1. Hello Miss West thank you for commenting on my blog.

      Well my literacy class and I had to pick three random words from the boxes on this google doc and I had picked Hippos, LA, and Deodorant, and with those three words I had to make a statement and write a persuasive piece of writing.

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  2. Hi Jane, I wish this was real, would love to get my hands on a deodorant that is great for the plants and environment and especially the health benefits! Imagine that!!! Really like the fact that you are enjoying literacy and that tasks like this make it fun! keep up the good work.

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