PASS THE STORY V1

Walt: punctuate our work 

Once upon a time there was a young girl. One day the young girl went into the woods looking for
food. Then she came upon a big bright green house and just walked inside without asking. She was looking for a quick snack. Then she found a big block of chocolate and she ate it then left. She was so full but what was weird was that she only ate a little bit. She never knew why she was always full. One time it got so annoying she went to the doctors, the doctor said she had a very bad disease called fullemsine she was so shocked. She could of went to the doctor earlier so she can eat more so she wouldn't get full so fast she should of ate more but she had a bad disease called fullemsine If they had fixed the disease she could of ate more.of Chocolate 1 Chocolate 2.The next day she went to find another snack knowing not to eat the chocolate bar she stumbled across the chocolate bar again just when the sickness went away, she was tempted to eat it so she did then she got sick again, she said oh over a chocolate bar. Next she looked on the ground under her bed and said oh there was ten dollars under her this hole time, then she went to the shop and got a big bar of chocolate. THE END

Original Writing




Once upon a time there was a young girl. One day the young girl went into the woods looking for food. Then she came upon a big bright green house and just walked inside without asking. She was looking for a quick snack. Then she found a big block of chocolate and she ate it then left. She was so full but the weird thing was that she only ate a little bit. She never knew why every time she ate she was always full. One time it got so annoying she decided to the doctors, the doctor said she had a very bad disease called fillerup and she was so shocked. She could of went to the doctor earlier so this disease could be treated. If they had fixed the disease she could of ate normal.The next day she went to find another snack knowing not to eat the chocolate bar she stumbled across. She was tempted to eat it so she did then she got sick again. Now she knows never to go into someone else house without asking.

Edited Writing

Task Description: We played a game called 'pass the story'. We would write a little bit of the story, and then pass it to the person next to us. They would then continue on the story. After the story was finished, we edited it to make sure it was punctuated properly.